"You okay, kid?" his father asked, leaning in. His breath smelled of peppermint and whiskey. "Just thinking about tomorrow," Jack lied.
"Don't think," his father grunted, clapping a heavy hand on his shoulder. "Just show up. That’s ninety percent of the job. In the plant, and in the house."
Jack sat in the center of a semi-circle of mismatched vinyl chairs, a pitcher of lukewarm Miller High Life sweating on the table before him. He was twenty-two, his tuxedo rental still in its plastic bag in the trunk of his Chevy, and his stomach was a cold knot of nerves. Tomorrow he’d marry Clara, but tonight belonged to the men of the assembly plant.
to a different location (like a city or a hunting cabin). Change the tone to be more comedic or suspenseful. Focus more on a specific character or dialogue.
In that quiet moment, the rowdy ghosts of the stag party faded. He wasn't just a "stag" being led to the altar; he was a man standing on the edge of a new decade, leaving the 70s and the shop-floor bravado behind. He turned the key, the engine turned over with a cold groan, and he drove home through the white, silent streets, ready for the morning.
The room erupted in a chorus of jeers and whistles. A jukebox in the corner was fighting a losing battle against the noise, wheezing out Blondie’s Call Me . The décor was strictly wood-paneled walls and deer heads that looked like they had seen too many Saturday nights.